Week 9

Week 9: Peer Review for Week 8

I do want to take a moment and say to you both Thank You!! Your critique of my work has been wonderful. I appreciate your input and thoughts.

Amity:

October 5^th: This blog is well written. The ideas from one paragraph flow to the next easily. I can see your personal self come through, but it does not over power the point you are trying to make. Wonderfully done!

October 7^th: The paragraphs glide nicely from on to the next. You add many details to support your quotes. I could tell this writing assignment was interesting to you. Nice Job!

Jessica:

 October 5^th: The paragraphs flow so nicely. I admire that about your work. You make great points to support your thesis statement. Last paragraph I found a grammar error: “marriage last longer; that then can become an issue of overpopulation.”  Perhaps saying marriage last longer; that they can become an … Over all you did a wonderful job.

October 7^th: The paragraphs flowed nicely from one to the next. Your use of quotes from the reading was well placed. I like the way you put your personal thoughts in the last paragraph. I think this was really well done. Great Job!!

Week 8

Week 8: Peer Review Week 7

Amity Connally:

9/28/10- Wonderful work! I like that you have been able to put a life experience to your writing. Your conflict showed the typical scenario of Tannen’s writing. You explored the “she said” point of view well. I can understand why your expectation of marriage failed. (Please remember this is just an observation from your writing, not a judgment of you.)

9/30/10- I like the way you explain the evolutionary psychology as Darwin explained it. The paragraphs flow nicely from one paragraph to the next. You use quotes from the reading to make your point wonderfully.

Jessica Chee:

9/28/10- Great job! I like the way the paragraphs emerge from one to the next. I like the example you give of your husband not listening and relating it to the boyfriend laying on the floor story from the reading.

9/30/10- Nicely done. You make your point throughout your writing. I like how you used quotes from the reading to make those points.

Love??

           So you think you have fallen in love and are in absolute bliss!! What if you were told it is just a chemical reaction that amounts to having large quantities of chocolate?? “Now researchers are beginning to sort out how body and mind work together to produce the wild, tender, ineffable feelings we call love.” (Brownlee 295) If this is true, then every person who falls in love must find the right person to cause the right chemical reaction to sustain them throughout their lives?

Week 8: Beetles pg 310 # 1

                A man is standing at the edge of the bar, and notices a lovely lady on the other side of the bar. She winks at him in a seductive manner to call him over. He succumbs to his biochemical reactions that are happening in his body to entice her come hither stare.  They meet, and instantly they have a connection. They date for a few months and finally he pops the question. They marry within a few months. Then the honeymoon is over and real life begins.

                As an outsider looking in, this dance between two people is lovely and graceful. I think that this dance has happened ever since man appeared on earth.  There has always been love, but now scientist can tell you what chemicals are flowing through the body during each stage of a couple’s development. There is infatuation. This will drive a sober man to drink if they cannot get the affection of a woman.

Work Cited

Brownlee, Shannon. "Biochemistry- What’s Chemistry Got to Do With It?" Academic

                Communities/Disciplinary Conventions. Ed.Bonnie Beedles and Michael Petracca. Upper

                Saddle River: Prentice Hall, 2001. 294-298.