Week 9

Week 9: Peer Review for Week 8

I do want to take a moment and say to you both Thank You!! Your critique of my work has been wonderful. I appreciate your input and thoughts.

Amity:

October 5^th: This blog is well written. The ideas from one paragraph flow to the next easily. I can see your personal self come through, but it does not over power the point you are trying to make. Wonderfully done!

October 7^th: The paragraphs glide nicely from on to the next. You add many details to support your quotes. I could tell this writing assignment was interesting to you. Nice Job!

Jessica:

 October 5^th: The paragraphs flow so nicely. I admire that about your work. You make great points to support your thesis statement. Last paragraph I found a grammar error: “marriage last longer; that then can become an issue of overpopulation.”  Perhaps saying marriage last longer; that they can become an … Over all you did a wonderful job.

October 7^th: The paragraphs flowed nicely from one to the next. Your use of quotes from the reading was well placed. I like the way you put your personal thoughts in the last paragraph. I think this was really well done. Great Job!!

Week 8

Week 8: Peer Review Week 7

Amity Connally:

9/28/10- Wonderful work! I like that you have been able to put a life experience to your writing. Your conflict showed the typical scenario of Tannen’s writing. You explored the “she said” point of view well. I can understand why your expectation of marriage failed. (Please remember this is just an observation from your writing, not a judgment of you.)

9/30/10- I like the way you explain the evolutionary psychology as Darwin explained it. The paragraphs flow nicely from one paragraph to the next. You use quotes from the reading to make your point wonderfully.

Jessica Chee:

9/28/10- Great job! I like the way the paragraphs emerge from one to the next. I like the example you give of your husband not listening and relating it to the boyfriend laying on the floor story from the reading.

9/30/10- Nicely done. You make your point throughout your writing. I like how you used quotes from the reading to make those points.

Love??

           So you think you have fallen in love and are in absolute bliss!! What if you were told it is just a chemical reaction that amounts to having large quantities of chocolate?? “Now researchers are beginning to sort out how body and mind work together to produce the wild, tender, ineffable feelings we call love.” (Brownlee 295) If this is true, then every person who falls in love must find the right person to cause the right chemical reaction to sustain them throughout their lives?

Week 8: Beetles pg 310 # 1

                A man is standing at the edge of the bar, and notices a lovely lady on the other side of the bar. She winks at him in a seductive manner to call him over. He succumbs to his biochemical reactions that are happening in his body to entice her come hither stare.  They meet, and instantly they have a connection. They date for a few months and finally he pops the question. They marry within a few months. Then the honeymoon is over and real life begins.

                As an outsider looking in, this dance between two people is lovely and graceful. I think that this dance has happened ever since man appeared on earth.  There has always been love, but now scientist can tell you what chemicals are flowing through the body during each stage of a couple’s development. There is infatuation. This will drive a sober man to drink if they cannot get the affection of a woman.

Work Cited

Brownlee, Shannon. "Biochemistry- What’s Chemistry Got to Do With It?" Academic

                Communities/Disciplinary Conventions. Ed.Bonnie Beedles and Michael Petracca. Upper

                Saddle River: Prentice Hall, 2001. 294-298.

Week 7: Directed Free Write pg 246

                So many discussions to choose from, which one do I talk about?? Oh! I know. What is the best way to work out in the gym? Of course, I know the best way for me is to go slow and easy. I need to build up to the higher speed of the treadmill and elliptical machines, and then use lower weight on the circuit training equipment. My brother’s advice to me was to go as fast as I can for as long as possible. All the while, my brother is looking off elsewhere looking at the wall and I was getting irritated because he was not looking at me. He would not acknowledge any of my comments or suggestions. In the end, we both left angry and frustrated with each other.

                From the reading, I gathered that the conversation I had with my brother was a typical miscommunication problem most men and women face each day. With that being said, most of the essay written by Deborah Tannen relates to our conversation as far as how we were raised to fill the typical male or female roles.

                Tannen states “I believe these systematic differences in childhood socialization make talk between women and men like cross-cultural communication,” (Beetles, 242).  According to the essay, boys are a part of hierarchy relationships in comparison to girls who relate to others by acknowledging other peoples thoughts and feelings. This makes girls feel closer and connected to the world around them.  My brother must have felt I was trying to order him to do things my way. But in all honesty, I was only trying to suggest a safe way to use the equipment at the gym.

                The body language a girl expresses is different in comparison to a boy’s body language. Girls like to have eye contact and some kind of acceptance where boys do not need any kind of recognition during a conversation. It drove me crazy my brother was not looking directly at me. I believed he was just ignoring anything I had to say. He never even said if I was right or wrong in his opinion.

                I guess it is sometimes funny how men and women interact with each other. If only I would have had this small piece of knowledge this conversation might not have been so frustrating. I think the next time I talk to my brother it will be with a little bit more understanding.

Work Cited

 

Tannen, Deborah. "Sex, Lies, and Conversation" Academic Communities/Disciplinary

     Conventions.Ed.Bonnie Beedles and Michael Petracca. Upper Saddle River: Prentice Hall,

     2001. 240-245.

Peer Review for Week 6

Amity Connolly:

9/21/10: Ha! Ha! Ha! This movie sound hilarious. I remember seeing previews, but it just didn’t look like my cup of tea. Well after reading your blog post, I am going to have to rent it.

Your blog post was informative about who the characters are. From your description of the movie, it seems that our society accepts this kind of behavior, especially with Las Vegas’ motto. I like how the paragraphs flow from one to the next.

9/23/10: I like the way this blog flows. As the reader, I am able to understand the where the writing is going. I like that you put your own experience into this piece. It is amazing how much technology plays such a role in our lives. How did the world exist without it??

Jessica Chee:

9/21/10: I hope you are feeling better. I had the flu about two weeks ago and it was not fun. Sadly, the day I called off work so did my assistant. So my classroom was chaotic when I returned.

9/23/10: I think your blog for this day is well written. The paragraphs flow easily and I like that in the first paragraph you had quotes from the reading to make your point. I think you hit the nail on the head in your second paragraph when you stated “…, the family disperses to use different forms of technology.” It is sad to think that this is a true reality of our times, but good for gays and lesbians as they say to not be “in the closet.”

The Changing Face Of Family

When I read the essay Capitalism and Gay Identity by John D'Emilio, I immediately thought of a lesbian friend. She works very hard to have a house and has adopted four children from the foster care system. She has taken care of these children with a heart of gold. I wonder if this would have been the case back in the 1920's?? All four children come from sad homes, where the parents were unable to care for these children properly. All four children were first in her care as foster children, but as time has gone on, the parents have been found unfit to take care of these children. Two of the children are actual siblings that have been kept together. Sadly, I know as D'Emilio has stated "...excluded from families as most of us are, we have had to create, for our survival, networks of support that do not depend on the bonds of blood or license of the state, but that are freely chosen and nurtured" (Beetles, 236). All she wants is to be accepted by not only her family, but the rest of society. I think as time goes on with the state of the economy and the states needing more money gay and lesbian marriages will become an everyday affair. The state of Arizona is in debt beyond anything I could imagine. Eventually, the states are going to realize that they will be able to collect more money through these unions.

Week 6: Movies

This week’s reading was interesting and a little difficult to understand. In the Seduction and betrayal in the Heartland: Thelma and Louise by Jack Boozer, I found the story to be strange. I remember a very long time ago watching this film and thinking that these are two ladies who do not want to be hurt anymore. So they take the world by the short hairs to say the least, and give them something to write home about. As Boozer states "Thelma and Louise is seen, for example, to be either an imperfect satirical analogy of woman's dilemma in contemporary America, or an unrealistic female liberation fantasy that backhandedly supports reactionary violence."(Beedles, 208-9) This was a movie that just gave to world something to talk about. It is kind of like the film 9 to 5 with Dolly Parton in it. She plays a secretary who is just fed up with the males dominating the work area. I do not remember the other two ladies in the film, but they decided to kidnap the boss who treated them like dirt. Then they implemented different programs like a daycare for working moms and a part time work program. These ladies were ahead of their time in bringing about change into a male dominated work place.